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16 May 2009 @ 02:53 pm
The complete Freeport rewrite, link to all chapters  
Title: Freeport
Pairings: 2x5
Rated: NC17 - for language, violence, sexual content
Spoilers: Some, for series and episode zero.
Disclaimer: Gundam Wing belongs to its owners (Bandai, Sunset, and a whole host of others, none of which are me) and I'm not making any money off of them.

NOTE: This copy of Freeport was rewritten to clean up some punctuation, grammar, odd sentences, a few redundancies etc. Nothing major has changed in the plot, but a lot got fixed in the form.

Warning: I'm sticking very close to the series' timeline in this fic. There won't be too many spoilers as the action happens at a later date. But for those who have not seen the series and are relying on fanon, note that this means that Duo and Wufei have NOT spent all that much time together during the war, and no, the boys never found themselves playing 'house' in one of Quatre's legendary mansions for months, or all hiding out in the same school or anything. EW didn't happen though (I sometimes wish EW had never happened in the real world, either... )


Part 1
Part 2
Part 3
Part 4
Part 5
Part 6
Part 7
Part 8
Part 9
Part 10
Part 11
Part 12
Part 13
Part 14
Part 15
Part 16
Part 17
Part 18
Part 19
Part 20
Part 21
Part 22
Part 23
Part 24
Part 25
Part 26
Part 27
Part 28
Part 29
Part 30
Part 31
Part 32
Part 33
Part 34
Part 35 (Epilogue)
 
 
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kiyakotarikiyakotari on May 17th, 2009 12:23 am (UTC)
You rock SO hardcore.
Maldorormaldoror_gw on May 17th, 2009 04:11 am (UTC)
Why thank you ^_____^
aubergineautumn on May 17th, 2009 12:51 am (UTC)
How is the rewrite different from the original? Did the plot change?
Maldorormaldoror_gw on May 17th, 2009 04:10 am (UTC)
No, I only cleaned up the punctuations, some sentences, and changed a few clunky paragraph in some scenes. It's the same old Freeport, just with a new coat of paint.
(Anonymous) on May 17th, 2009 06:32 am (UTC)
Enna Everbright
I love Freeport, but I love Source of all Things more. Is there a chance that you will start with this story next? Please, please, please.
(Anonymous) on July 13th, 2009 04:14 am (UTC)
Re: Enna Everbright
Couldn't agree more, except I disagree. ^_^ I love Freeport the most, but I would be ecstatic to see more Source of All Things...
wolfco_tr: funnywolfco_tr on May 17th, 2009 11:59 pm (UTC)
Thanks for writing one of the most awesome fanfics ever. Seriously, I love this story. I have a weakness for your portrayal of Wufei in the Arrangement, but as far as background locations go... Freeport is literately unbeatable. It is so well structured, I've often wondered why somewhere like it doesn't actually existing on a small scale in this our real world.
Muffie: fangirlingmuffiewrites on May 18th, 2009 02:56 am (UTC)
You're my heero!
A Tale of a Procrastinating Perfectionist: sai squeeeanti_paragon on May 19th, 2009 04:40 am (UTC)
*skips around with joy* Oh I am going to have a good week indeed!

Thank you for your writing and being your awesome self.
cheshire_sithcheshire_sith on July 25th, 2009 11:01 pm (UTC)
Just stopping by to say I really love this story. I first read your earlier version a couple years back. Love the whole thing, but I'm particularly fond of your descriptions of Freeport the colony. Better world-building than a lot of "original" scifi (actually, find myself referencing/describing elements such as the anarchist setup to friends completely unacquainted with Gundam Wing - it's just that good). Will enjoy reading the new version.
kyoki: Zoooombiee kyoki_kiss on August 5th, 2009 07:45 pm (UTC)
Before I even begin to read, let me say 2x5 is my fave and I just shivered from anticipation of reading and 35 part COMPLETED fic. Thank you in advance. *Slowly clicks on parts 1*

knownotseemsknownotseems on August 6th, 2009 05:27 am (UTC)
I read this a while ago, but I just wanted to send feedback. AMAZING work. I'm sure you knew that by now, though. ;)
Seriously, I love 5x2 but, even if I didn't, this piece is so well written that I couldn't have loved it more if I had tried.
I will absolutely be reading any of your work I might have missed and hope hope hope to see more GW fics from you in the future.
*hopes*
Maldorormaldoror_gw on August 8th, 2009 03:52 am (UTC)
Thanks! It's always good to hear from readers who loved the fic! I don't think I'll be going back to GW unfortunately, too much distance from it now, but I did enjoy this quick return into the dark and dreary streets of Freeport (stalking Wufei and Duo)
Aegisaegistheia on September 12th, 2009 09:11 pm (UTC)
This is going to be a bit of a read, pt.1
Oh, lord. This is several years belated, but I figured, better late than never, right? Please bear with me for a bit.

I found this WAY back on raygunworks.net, I think right before you posted the last chapter? And I was SMITTEN by the world you built. You had single-handedly shoved me into the GW fandom and also shown me what a critical part of good writing looks like - you show, not tell. (Incidentally, I think I actually like the first version a little more than this edited one. The edited version had much more consistent grammar and a calmer Wufei, which makes a lot of sense, but part of me enjoyed the overreactions and descriptive thoughts/observations Wufei had in the first version. I recall that he thought a lot more in prose and similies, and I highly enjoy the similies and metaphors you write, so I was a little :( to see some of them them go even if they weren't necessary. However, the very fact that they weren't necessary and that the form was fixed up a bit meant that the edited version was a much cleaner, smoother read, which I highly appreciated too.)

You write Wufei with an enviable delicacy that I haven't been able to find since you stopped writing for GW. I went to watch GW not long after I finished a large majority of your stories, and I found him disappointingly flat for a big part of the series, after having immersed myself in such a long and involved character development piece. Your Duo, too - all his depths and darkness were fascinating to behold, as well as his grudging acceptance - and occasional vocal/physical dissention - of who Wufei was.

(Actually, I'd found the entire GW cast vaguely flat as well, because of all the focus on politics and fast-paced action, and because I had grown used to the fully fleshed-out characters I'd read in your stories. Then I made my peace with them by developing my own interpretations, but mainly it was you who encouraged all that mental activity in the end.)

Which reminds me - your stories are incredible, you know? For the plot and characters, of course, but also for the sheer variety of interpretations and quirks eacn incarnation had in your writing. Each character was at once hir original selves, and also different from another version of hirself in another of your tales. They had different outlooks in life, were on different paths that they'd chosen, found and developed different parts of themselves, were at different stages in life. Very few authors take the effort to recreate characters - especially the same ones - for different stories, but you actually went and played what-if with all of them, with astoundingly astute observations about who they were and what the core of their beliefs were that made them who they were in the original series, and how that affected them now, etc.

I highly enjoyed the political intrigue and social issues that you dealt with in an anarchic society. The way Freeport worked out, balanced on the edge of destruction, is a fascinating concept and undoubtedly unattainable on Earth. Especially the lack of physical currency and the conversion into honour-bound currency...! And the brutally logical methodology that Freeport worked on! I won't even begin to tell how much sleep I gave up reading this because I just couldn't stop. (Luckily I was young enough to be unaffected by lack of sleep...ah, the vigours of youth.)

I'd meant to write you a giant review after I finished by rereading and commenting on every bit I liked, but I gave up on that...a part of me wish I hadn't. But I think this is more concise and coherent anyway, which is the key to a good story! *dork*

[cont'd because I can't stop my hands from typing]
Aegisaegistheia on September 12th, 2009 09:15 pm (UTC)
This is going to be a bit of a read, pt.2
[cont]

I'd wanted to squeeze in a quick "thanks!" & review for The Arrangement as well, but truly this is rambly and run-on-sentence-filled enough for one comment, so I'll refrain for now. But that epic was quite amazing to read as well, not the least because Wufei's powerful trial by fire was witnessed in real time by the reader as well. The Source was another fantasy that really pulled at my imagination; it's a pity that its destiny appears to be labeled incomplete.

Anyway, thank you for sharing such an excellent piece of your works with us! It was truly a pleasure to read and experience, and although I mourn your departure from the active GW writing community, at least you still write! You inspired me to think hard for my own writings and showed me the difference between thinking hard and thinking creative and thinking consistency and imagining, period.

I'm actually starting One Piece, so I'll definitely read your stories from that as well as soon as I catch up! (Ahahaha 556+ chapters o-omg.) I'm promised heartbreak and laughter from that series, so that's definitely up my alley. After all, that's what your stories gave me too.

-Aegis

PS I friended you to keep track of your updates...just a heads-up!
Maldorormaldoror_gw on September 30th, 2009 02:19 am (UTC)
Re: This is going to be a bit of a read, pt.2
Thanks for the great review! And welcome to the friend's list, for those increasingly rare occasions where I can badger my schedule into posting something (I remember the good ol' days when I could post several times a week...oy vey...)

'Show, not tell' is something I'm constantly striving for, and one of the reasons I did the rewrite, some parts were not that subtle and too explanatory...as well as all those exclamation marks :P A few similes got stripped out, but I think I kept the better ones (because I love similes too). There were a few paragraphs I mourned, but they were just too top-heavy. I've got to propagate the rewrite around to my archive sites now, I keep putting it off...

I also found a second watch of GW a little disappointing; some of the plot and characters feels sooo contrived. But as a whole, the GW fandom has some excellent writing, and I think this stems from the fact that the series tried to do something bold in its statements and its story. I wouldn't watch it again, but it stays a fond memory! Except for some cringeworthy Gary Stu moments with the boys that I try to blot out of my memory of the series...

I'm really glad you liked the character development in this and other fics; In my opinion, because of the reasons mentioned in the above paragraph on the original characters and how they can be pretty contrived, I always found that labeling fics as IC/OC is dubious (as long as Wufei is not a ridiculous rant-machine and Duo is not in a goth-loli ensemble and bursting into tears at every end of chapter and Quatre is a lil' angel etc...) But having the characters internally consistent INSIDE the fic is feasible and should be something writers aim for. My Wufei in The Arrangement is younger and has not had his shiny ideals tarnished as in Freeport, so perforce he has to be a different character. Heck, that's part of the fun of writing, as far as I'm concerned! Put the characters through different shades of hell and see how they come out the other side *evil smirk* I had the same fun with Freeport and its background concepts. How often does someone get a sandbox in which to (harmlessly) test out political concepts such as anarchy, communism, socialism and a few other -isms I don't even know the name for? AND with hot guys to boot?

Oh man, you're starting One Piece? What a crazy journey ahead of you. It's definitely not every body's cup of tea, but if it gets under your skin, you're sunk (friendly warning from one who lost a lot of sleep to that series WITHOUT the vigours of youth). The series isn't as in-depth and serious as GW, and the fanfiction of the fandom reflects that...but that's not necessarily a bad thing!

Lol, I love long reviews and tend to answer in kind. Thanks again, and I'm glad you enjoyed my stories!
szzztszzzt on September 29th, 2009 10:01 am (UTC)
Freeport fanart!
I finished reading this a couple days ago; on the reread I will slow down enough to go typo-spotting, but first I had to draw fanart.

tiny PNG
Maldorormaldoror_gw on September 30th, 2009 01:50 am (UTC)
Re: Freeport fanart!
Holy smouldering looks, batman! Yum, Wufei and Freeport in perfect juxtaposition, and what a lovely thing that is. Wufei is veeeery nice, and I love the sordid, steel-ridden background, but the absolute cherry on the cake is the Anarchy sign on the crate. Thanks for the amazing pic!
szzztszzzt on September 30th, 2009 03:37 am (UTC)
Re: Freeport fanart!
It was so much fun and so satisfying to draw, oh the sleep loss was worth it. Rarely have I enjoyed appeasing the bunnies so much. I'm glad you like it!

I actually thought "Wouldn't it be funny if that's her favorite part?" XD
Banavitiates on December 24th, 2009 06:04 pm (UTC)
Ever since I read your fiction for GW (I was a rare 1x5 fan), I haven't been able to find anything quite like it. Even the "good" fics for the small GW fandom nowadays aren't really good. If it's not the writing style that doesn't cut it for me, it's the portrayal of the characters as girls with male anatomy...essentially.

You were Queen of 1x5 and 2x5. Freeport and The Arrangement set the bar and nobody has been able to even come close. When you left Gundam Wing, I think there were a good deal of us 1x5 fans who literally mourned.

In any case, your Freeport and The Arrangement were what drove me to try my own hand at writing for 1x5 and 2x5. I wouldn't be exaggerating if I said that your fanfics shaped me to some degree in my own writings. And though my recent Luck of the Draw was written for a friend, I think you can spot traces of your influence in the story.

Maldoror, I salute you. There will never be another person who will be able to match what you have written for the Gundam Wing community.
kyskkysk on March 26th, 2010 11:37 am (UTC)
I am so happy I found your Livejournal! I have been reading your GW stories over and over again on different archives and mourning that I could not find anything more. I will go over and start reading your original stories ASAP.
As far as I understood you had left the GW fandom, but I saw here that you had rewritten Freeport *starts Word to save the new version, in case of zombie attach or other apocalyptic event threatening my access to Internet*. Will you continue rewriting the other stories to, maybe even continue them...? *glances at Dark Tales*

I have so much I have wanted to say to you about your stories when I read them (mostly about how awesome you are), but that post would be too long to write today. So I'll swing by here again after I have read your latest original story. Am very excited to see what kind of characters you build on your own.

Take care!
rolittlerhymes on July 7th, 2010 12:17 pm (UTC)
This story is so awesome! The pacing is perfect (the buildup to Wufei's reveal of why he's really in Freeport = AMAZING), the characterisation is great, and the complexity of the worldbuilding makes me ♥__♥. I love how you write Wufei and Duo, as individuals and as a team, and I really like how the ending opens up this glimpse of their future together and following their ideals. This story reminded me all over again about how great GW is and now I'm full of massive nostalgia! This is a good thing. :)
anotherslashfan on September 6th, 2010 08:59 am (UTC)
Thank you for re-writing Freeport! I've always loved this story and re-read it very often; I think it's amazing you took the time to make it even better than it was before!
This story really shaped my tastes for fanfiction in general - I especially loved the understated romance and all the political philosophy. Thank you!
Cody: [fandom] Gundam Wingmercurybard on September 11th, 2010 12:59 am (UTC)
You were writing this (the first) time when I was first getting into fandom, and I was following it on the GW Addiction boards. Man, has this been a trip down memory lane!

And this is still one of the best fics I've read in any fandom--the characters feel genuine, the setting is fantastic, it's well plotted, and the fight scenes are awesome.
kyskkysk on October 13th, 2010 07:46 am (UTC)
I was just rereading the Arrangement on GWA, and in one of the author's notes you say that you have put up the fanart you got from that story in your gallery. Unfortunately the link there is broken, do you have it anywhere else?
Jo: Dean - hand/bookratherbe4gotten on January 26th, 2011 02:38 pm (UTC)
Back for yet another re-read. This story remains one of the best things I have ever read, fanfic or otherwise. I'm not sure what it is, but there's something about it that just grabs my attention and draws me in. It's become one of those things I come back to re-read over and over again, like Lord of the Rings or Robert Jordan's Wheel of Time series, especial when I'm feeling the need to escape. Thanks you!
eltanin-draco.dreamwidth.org on May 7th, 2013 05:24 pm (UTC)
I have been reading and re-reading this story for years, and I just want to add another THANK YOU to the pile. I love the way you write both Duo and Wufei, keeping them both complex and interesting. Being able to work in the darker parts of their personalities and weaving that with the lighter sides is a skill few authors have. So again, thank you for such a wonderful story.
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