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02 April 2006 @ 10:23 am
Naruto Fic: Diplomatic Relations, Side Story  
Here's the before-last bit of DR, a small sidestory again. I'm still waaaaaay behind on answering reviews, sorry, but I do love them all ^_^





Side Story: A Family Reunion



Kankuro cursed little brothers, bowl-cutted Leaf Jounin, that stupid thing called love and the distance between Suna and Konoha. Particularly the latter.

Where the hell was his Kazekage?

Kankuro was bone-tired and annoyed, and he wanted a shower. The air in this forest-bound village felt too damp and stifling, even though the temperature was cool enough. Kankuro wanted some real food, a good bed and twenty four hours of sleep. Since those were out of his reach, he'd have settled for just five minutes to lean against a wall to catch his breath, but he was damned if he was going to show a weakness to the three Konoha ANBU who were escorting him, so he wasn't even going to get that.

The ANBU ahead of him leapt forward towards another roof barely visible in the pre-dawn conditions. Kankuro followed, and so did the two at his back. A few people walked through the streets below, but they didn't look up at the movement above, any more than they did in Sunagakure. It appeared his guides were leading him towards the centre of the village, towards the Administration buildings, the barracks, and probably the jails. Kankuro let loose a few more choice mental curses, though he kept his face carved into a mask of uncaring.

His three silent shadows hadn't told him where Gaara was, and that worried Kankuro as much as it pissed him off. By his calculation, he was only two-three hours behind his brother; he'd made a pretty damn good time if he said so himself. He'd left Gaara's bodyguards as backup outside of Konoha territory, and ventured to the border alone. The ANBU had picked him up there with absolutely no sign of surprise or any pointed questions, which meant Gaara had indeed arrived before him and warned them of his arrival. Kankuro was a foreigner here, without travel papers, so he had to obey their silent injunctions, but if someone didn't tell him where his brother was real soon-

Kankuro started to leap towards the next roof, and then caught himself short. His escort had stopped. He glanced at the white masks in surprise, and then followed the direction of their gaze and looked down at the street below.

Gaara! And Lee. Thank god...

"See 'em. Thanks for the walk, fellas. And for the sparkling conversation," Kankuro threw over his shoulder before dropping down into the street ahead of his brother and Lee.

They both looked unharmed. Kankuro could feel other ANBU about, but there was no hostility or killing intent in the air, and the cork was in the gourd. The Sand Jounin felt that knot of tension over his spine relax for the first time in nearly three days.

"So, did it go okay?" he drawled, straightening up and putting his hands in his pockets.

"Yes," Gaara answered shortly, almost murderously.

Hell, Kankuro thought, if that's how he takes it when it goes fine, what would it have been like if it had gone badly? He didn't voice the quip, though, because there was always the possibility his brother might give him a straight answer, and Kankuro would sleep better at night not knowing.

"Is the problem all sorted?" he asked lazily, trying to spot and count the high-level Shinobi around them without being overt about it.

"Yes," Lee said, after a small hesitation and a look at Gaara that Kankuro couldn't interpret. Gaara nodded once in agreement.

"Cool."

Kankuro let the two walk on and fell into step behind them. That's when he noticed they were holding hands. That was almost cute. In a really bad contact-embarrassment kind of way. Damn it, they were in the middle of a foreign village - not that that would be any less mortifying in the middle of Suna. Act tough, guys.

A second glance informed him that this wasn't 'skipping along the road' hand-holding, it was an anchoring death grip, and it wasn't even clear who was anchoring whom because they both looked pretty ragged. The sooner they got out of this village-...wait a minute.

"Hey, guys? Where we going? The gate's thataway."

"We're going to see Gai-sensei," Lee said, giving Kankuro a quick glance over his shoulder.

"Reeeaaally." Oh, this day just got better and better.

Kankuro thought of objecting, maybe pointing out that it was four in the morning, and not a time to get senseis out of bed, so maybe they could come back another day. But something in Gaara's silence, in the small line between Lee's impressive brows, and the way their hands gripped, triggered Kankuro's instincts, and he decided to keep his peace. They'd go see Gai-sensei, and hopefully the man wouldn't be quite as weird as Kankuro remembered him.

Kankuro kept a hold of that slim hope until Lee had diffidently knocked on the door of a suite of small apartments, and it burst open to reveal the man himself, larger than life, big eyebrows and bowl-cut and all, in pea-green pyjamas decorated with small yellow stars.

Kankuro rubbed his eyes and debated waiting for them at the gate. But Gaara was his Kazekage; Kankuro had sworn to lay down his life in his defence, all that. What kind of Shinobi would he be if he left his leader by himself with a strange (make that a very strange) Leaf ninja?

"Lee!"

"Gai-sensei!"

A sane one, Kankuro concluded, dropping his pained gaze away from the enthusiastic and technicolored hug. Gaara would be perfectly safe. And somewhere in this joint there had to be an open eatery and breakfast with his name on it-

Kankuro's hands shot to the straps on his shoulders as he suddenly felt/heard/sensed a presence behind him. He spun around. Karasu was half off his back, and his left hand was wrapped around Kuroaki's scroll. Son of a bitch! How had this guy gotten this close without them hearing him!

"Yo," the guy said, barely looking up from where he was pulling on his gloves. He wore a mask over part of his face, a headband over one eye, and an air of having seen it all. It was the latter which triggered Kankuro's memory. Three years ago or more now, when Gaara had been taken by Akatsuki, this guy had come with the Konoha contingent. Kakashi. Hatake Kakashi, Naruto's Jounin cell leader.

At Kankuro's back, Gaara's Sand growled in its gourd and there was a small 'tck' noise of the cork edging out of the container's mouth. The Kazekage had been startled too, and that wasn't a good thing in the present circumstances.

"Gai," Kakashi added, apparently oblivious of the reaction of the two Sand nin, "why don't we take this inside before you wake up the whole neighbourhood?"

"Good idea! Oh, a thousand apologies, Kazekage-sama, I was so caught up with greeting my beloved pupil that I forgot my manners. Welcome! Please do me the honour of entering my residence!"

Gaara was his usual polite self: he didn't answer the apology, or the greeting, or Gai's courteous gesture. He just stared at the Leaf Jounin as if he were an interesting new species of bug until Lee walked past his teacher, and then he followed. Fortunately for Kankuro's peace of mind and Suna Shinobi pride, they weren't holding hands any more.

"After you," Kakashi murmured to the Sand Jounin, making a gesture towards the door.

Kankuro didn't budge. "What the hell are you doing here?"

That probably wasn't much more polite than Gaara's reaction, but Temari was the diplomat in their little family; Kankuro was just the guy who'd been running for three days straight through desert, savannah and forest, and who didn't like being startled.

"I'm Gai's next-door neighbour. We've met before-"

"Yeah, I remember." The man's stats and details had been retrieved from the mental filing system every ninja kept in their head. Copy-nin Kakashi, genius of a thousand jutsu, with an impressive number of recorded kills. No wonder he'd been able to get on their six like that.

The visible eye curved into a friendly line as the man repeated his gesture of invitation. "Come on, let's go in, no need to disturb the other neighbours."

None of those other neighbours had poked their heads from their doors to see what Gai was bellowing about at this ungodly hour of the morning. Apparently they were used to it. But that didn't make standing out in the hallway any more useful or judicious. Kankuro looked at the open door reluctantly, but he really couldn't leave his leader alone with two foreign Jounin under these odd circumstances, so he put a hand beneath the strap keeping his weapons on his back, squared his shoulders and entered the Beast's den.

It was so very much like Lee's room in the Suna barracks it was almost creepy. Kankuro looked gloomily at the training weights, the books on martial arts, the green uniform hanging from the door of the dresser...the only difference was the style of the sparse furnishings, a lack of cactus and the presence of several full-length mirrors (good god, why?!)

I should have gone for breakfast, Kankuro thought, but put his back against the wall near the door, attentive and dutiful. The other guy, Kakashi, sprawled into a low seat a few feet away, looking completely at home. What he was doing here in the first place was a mystery, but neither Lee nor Gai commented on his presence. Gaara hadn't either, though he'd positioned himself where he could keep an eye on both Leafs and have a clear strike without endangering Kankuro or Lee. Since that was Gaara's usual approach to diplomacy, Kankuro didn't pay it much note.

"Gai-sensei," Lee interrupted his teacher's magnificent and loud greeting mid-stream, in a tense voice that brought Kankuro's attention back to him. "I'm sorry, we can't stay very long."

Thank god, Kankuro thought, seeing a light of hope in the darkness.

"But before we go, I have something I need to tell you," Lee added, face all screwed up.

Kankuro concluded that the light in the darkness was a fire jutsu coming at him full blast. If he'd known it was going to be this kind of visit, he'd have definitely gone for breakfast, or even waited for them outside the door and out of earshot of anything really cringe-worthy that was sure to follow.

Still...now that he was here...The thought insinuated itself into his mind. This nutcase over there was one of the most important people in Lee's life, and if he didn't take Lee's confession well...or if he disapproved of Gaara...Kankuro realized he was going to have to stay, because there was always the possibility that his brother or Lee might need moral support in a few minutes. Damn it, Kankuro concluded, slouching against the wall and getting ready to weather the worse; family sucked.

"You have to leave already? But you must have only arrived a few hours ago at the most." Gai looked honestly unhappy at the thought. "Were you here on a diplomatic visit? If I'd known, I would have-"

"Um, something like that. Gai-sensei, there's no easy way- I have to tell you- I'm gay!" Lee blurted out.

Oh, smooth.

Gai stared at him wide-eyed for a few seconds- Kankuro's attention was drawn to the side by a small noise, and he glanced down to see that the other Leaf Jounin had produced a book from somewhere and was flipping through the pages.

"Well, Lee, this is quite a surprise," Gai said gravely. Then his face seemed to explode into this huge shiny smile. "But I am glad! Glad that you have found yourself and grasped the full flower of your youth-"

"You don't look surprised," Kankuro muttered to the masked guy, tuning out the speech.

"Hmmmno. I was pretty sure the kid swung that way," Kakashi murmured. "Gai had a clue as well, but he was being polite and pretending he didn't know until Lee told him. Might have been hoping he was wrong and that he'd get some big-eyebrowed pseudo-grandkids one day. Do you want this seat?"

"Huh?"

"Did you want to sit down?" The Jounin flipped the page over, he'd not glanced Kankuro's way since they'd come in. "You look a bit tired and footsore, leaning there."

Kankuro decided he didn't like this guy. Way too cool for having been awakened at four in the morning to hear Lee confess his sexuality to the Lord of Eyebrows over there. Kankuro normally admired cool, but today he was all cooled out, what with the three day trip and the worry and Gai's pyjamas and all the rest.

He realized that Gai had fallen silent after his long and enthusiastic endorsement of gayness in general and Lee's in particular. Now Lee was straightening up and taking on that 'Challenge' position, which meant the corker was about to arrive.

"Gai-sensei, I've found my special person. The one for whom I would d- I mean, defend with all my strength, and who'll always be in my heart. Um-ah-you see-" and then he very unadvisedly put his hand on Gaara's shoulders and nudged him forward as if that was easier than saying it. To his credit, Gaara didn't blink or let an expression cross his features.

Gai staggered back in a way that could only be described as 'theatrical'- Kankuro's eyes were once more drawn to the other Jounin who'd tilted his book to better catch the light from the overhead lamp.

"You're still not surprised," he hissed at Kakashi.

"I have eyes. Two of them. One of them's quite good," the other Shinobi said, still without looking up.

Kankuro's attention returned to the main event. Gai had finished his stagger and was now examining Gaara with a serious look on his face. Gaara was staring back in a way that made Kankuro's nerves prickle ever so slightly.

"I see. Kazekage-sama…in the circumstances, may I call you Gaara?"

Gaara nodded slowly.

"Gaara. Do you return my adorable student's affections?"

Oh damn, he just had to ask-

"Yes."

Kakashi lifted his head from his book, looked at Gaara and then glanced over at Kankuro.

"I'm a bit surprised now," he offered helpfully.

Bastard, thought Kankuro, trying to hide the fact he was a hell of a lot more surprised than Kakashi appeared to be. From a couple of their conversations this past month, Kankuro knew that his brother was still struggling with a lot of the basics, and that a concept like 'love' was as alien to him as the far side of the moon. But then again, big-brows had used the word 'affections', not 'love'...and maybe Gaara had finally figured that much out at least. And of course, being Gaara, he would just say 'yes' without the slightest hint of self-consciousness.

"Wonderful!" Gai threw his arms wide- for a heart-stopping second, Kankuro thought he was going to hug the Kazekage, but apparently Gai had the survival instincts you'd expect in a Jounin, and only made an enthusiastic gesture in Gaara and Lee's direction.

Kankuro found himself wondering how his and Gaara's own father would have reacted, which was a very strange thought indeed. Maybe the dead could see what happened to their descendants. Maybe their father was watching this scene right now. If that was the case, the bastard was probably spinning in his grave. Good.

"Congratulations to you both!" Gai actually had tears of joy in his eyes. "May this youthful love strengthen the bonds between our two villages until nothing can-"

"Ah, we're not supposed to tell anybody. Not just yet," Lee said quickly, with a glance at Kankuro and Kakashi as well.

The green loony stopped dead in his tracks, and in his eyes Kankuro could read a quick and probably very accurate assessment of that statement and what it meant; after all, the guy couldn't be as crazy as he appeared, because Konoha still had some standards for their Jounin, surely, and so he had to be able to add two and two as well as anyone.

"It's only until the attack on Sound," Gaara said, voice its usual charming monotone. "After that we won't care who knows."

"Well said!" The Beast bounced back quickly. "And then we shall celebrate openly the wonderful-"

"He seems to have taken it well," Kakashi murmured, putting away his book and getting to his feet. Kankuro wondered if the purpose of Kakashi's presence here had mirrored his own; potential moral support for Gai, his fellow Jounin. It must have been obvious, spotting the three of them knocking on Gai's door just before dawn, that something heavy was about to go down.

"-match worthy of my beloved pupil-"

"He's going to go on like that for awhile," Kakashi commented. "At some point, he might even get serious, and that's even worse. Do you want some breakfast?"

Kankuro might not hate this bloke after all. "Hm, okay," he said, with the air of one granting favours.

"Splendid. Gaara-sama?"

Gaara had been staring at the Green Beast with eyes a trifle wider than usual in their dark rings. He glanced back slowly in Kakashi's direction.

"Would you like something to eat? I live next door; Lee can come over when he's finished."

Lee was standing there, eyes wide and as full of stars as Gai's pyjamas, drinking in his sensei's every word. Gai hadn't missed a single beat despite having Kakashi speaking in the background. He was now talking about the Springtime of Love. Kankuro hastily tuned him out again, because having someone talk about the Springtime of Love in reference to Gaara of the Desert was a bit too traumatic for four in the morning.

Gaara appeared to think the offer over, and then he shook his head shortly and turned back towards Gai.

The single visible eye widened and briefly lost that 'seen-it-all' air that clung to him as much as the mask. Kankuro smirked, since he wasn't surprised at all. He knew his brother; he could read beyond the mask. Gaara was tired, in unfamiliar territory, and something earlier today had alarmed him; from the way he'd held Lee's hand before, it had probably concerned the Jounin. Gaara's protective instincts were now on Full, and it would take something more important than breakfast or more terrible than the Green Beast of Konoha to get Gaara to let Lee out of his sight for another few hours.

"You mentioned some chow?" Kankuro purred, hands in pockets and relishing the brief reversal of the situation.

"Hm-hmm, right this way." His opponent had recovered fast, but Kankuro still felt this victory to be his.

Kankuro followed him out the door, with a last glance back. Gai and Lee were having some kind of back-and-forth, where Gai was barking out enthusiastic questions - Kankuro caught 'to have and to hold' before his hearing shut down again out of self-preservation - and Lee was answering 'Yes Gai-sensei!' with his fist and his voice raised high, face shining with serious fervour. Gaara was standing next to Lee and looking on, impassive. Not only did he not seem to be having second thoughts about shacking up with that chip off the old crazy block over there, he seemed to be listening attentively, as if there was something here he was trying to understand.

Kankuro followed Kakashi, lured out by the promise of food. But at the back of his mind, he was doing something very unusual for him. He was praying. Kankuro was used to facing life and death situations without relying on divine intervention, but in this instance, he was praying to the Gods of their barren desert home that whatever was in that room wasn't contagious and that his Kazekage wasn't going to go all round-eyed and start talking about the Springtime of Love. Because if there was ever a reason to go missing-nin, that would be it.

Trusting that there were some things that were against the very laws of nature, Kankuro closed the door behind him, and concentrated on the possibility of breakfast.



End Side Story



It will be two weeks, maybe three until I have the epilogue out, it's slow writing. But I should post the first chapter of the new GaaraLee, Kindred, next weekend, to compensate.

 
 
 
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锴 angry fishtrap 狗: high school punkkaigou on April 2nd, 2006 04:46 pm (UTC)
OMFG. Burst out laughing a number of times in this one, and startled the dogs each time, too. Kakashi's dry humor against Gai in the background (with Lee, starry-eyed), OMG, seen through Kankuro's exhausted, tired, worried (but not entirely wanting to admit that last part) POV... absolutely priceless. And getting to see Kakashi surprised? Now that's one for the record books...!
Maldorormaldoror_gw on April 12th, 2006 12:19 pm (UTC)
Yay, I managed to startle the dogs by proxy ^_^

Kankuro's exhausted, tired, worried (but not entirely wanting to admit that last part) POV

Yeah, I like guys who are all crusty on the outside but chewy-sweet on the inside. Of course he's worried about his friend and his brother, but he's a guy, a tough Shinobi, so 'act tough' :)
(Anonymous) on April 2nd, 2006 04:52 pm (UTC)
SO BRILLIANT!!! GASP! NEW FIC!!!!! I LOVE YOU!!!!!!!
Maldorormaldoror_gw on April 13th, 2006 11:48 pm (UTC)
Thanks ^_^ I hope you enjoy the fic as well!
Asuka Kureru: KakaIru_Dolphin dotdotdotaskerian on April 2nd, 2006 04:56 pm (UTC)
Kakashi lifted his head from his book, looked at Gaara and then glanced over at Kankuro.

"I'm a bit surprised now," he offered helpfully.


Kakashi KILLS me. XD

I love poor Kankuro's worry, and I really love that we get to see Lee meet Gai. I would have been sad if it had ended on the previous chapter's note; it was pretty grim and serious and had definite undertones of unhappy-for-choosing-between-Gai-and-Gaara-Lee ;_;

Gaara is definitely in love. Why else would he voluntarily suffer through one of Gai's speeches? XD (and now I'm getting a bunny about Gaara changing so much during the timeskip because he was, for some reason, perpetually around Gai, and Gai decided to teach him how to be human and stuff. There would be a few delicious issues with the chuunin exam incidents... mrrrr. XD)
Maldorormaldoror_gw on April 12th, 2006 12:22 pm (UTC)
Gaara is definitely in love. Why else would he voluntarily suffer through one of Gai's speeches?

Very true. Plus, I think he understands that Gai is responsible for a lot of Lee's character, and that understanding the one can help understand the other. Although I think he may need a few years of night studying and a primer to understand Gai...

*whistles innocently and feeds the bunnies steroids* I've had thoughts along those lines too. A sort of genfic where a post-Chuunin exam but pre-Kazekage Gaara opts to do some missions with his allies, and inserts himself into Team Gai because the Gai-Lee interaction had intrigued him and made him a bit envious...
(Anonymous) on April 2nd, 2006 04:58 pm (UTC)
That was so awesome...poor Kankuro it seems he's always stuck with the dirty work. First talking to Gaara about sex and then being around Gai-sensai to listen to his lecture about the springtime of youth and love.

"he was praying to the Gods of their barren desert home that whatever was in that room wasn't contagious and that his Kazekage wasn't going to go all round-eyed and start talking about the Springtime of Love."

I love this quote. It would signal the beginning of the Apocolypse if Gaara started mirroring Lee and Gai-sensai in exuberence. And what's this I hear about another GaaraLee fanfic. That is so freaking awesome. More stories about Gaara and Lee and their wacky relationship. I can't wait to read it...if reading DR has shown me anything it has shown me that you are an awesome writer and I will always love your stories...it was actually Big Heart, Drunken Fist that first made me start reading GaaraLee pairings...anyway let me finish ranting and I will be waiting patiently for this new story of yours. ^.^
Maldorormaldoror_gw on April 13th, 2006 11:51 pm (UTC)
It would signal the beginning of the Apocolypse if Gaara started mirroring Lee and Gai-sensai in exuberence.

And damn weird to boot ^^; I don't think Gaara is at risk, so we're not nearing the end of the world quite yet. Glad you liked the fic! (fics, apparently ^_^)
Dracana: yay pervertsgatekeeperdra on April 2nd, 2006 05:04 pm (UTC)
dear god, that's good stuff. Lee's so subtle, ain't he? and poor kankuro, can't handle too much at 4 in the morning. especially not something of Gai-caliber.
Looking forward to the new fic! ^_^ Thank you for writing!
(Anonymous) on April 3rd, 2006 09:02 pm (UTC)
It is ALWAYS too early in the morning for Gai-calibre speeches about the Springtime of Love. At 11:59 PM, it is still too early in the morning for Gai-calibre speeches about the Springtime of Love. :-)

Dani
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ChibiRisu-chan: Dattebayo! (by Domlandbubbles)chibirisuchan on April 2nd, 2006 05:11 pm (UTC)
MAD MAD GLEE. Every last one of 'em is spot-on perfect. ♥♥♥ If it was a little earlier in the night Kakashi and Kankuro so should've hit a bar together and commiserated for a while, but 4 is really more toward get-breakfast than get-drunk time of night, no matter how tempting the thought might be under the exceptionally traumatic circmstances...
Maldorormaldoror_gw on April 13th, 2006 11:56 pm (UTC)
Very true about getting together in a bar. I can just imagine it.

Kakashi: -and the time he told me about the Youthful Exuberance of Spring while we were in a hot spring...I still have nightmares.

Kankuro (well pickled in alcohol): ...I had to give Gaara The Talk...

Kakashi:...You win. Here, have another one.

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Maldorormaldoror_gw on April 13th, 2006 11:59 pm (UTC)
I hope they will love eachother forever and a lot of fluff and mushy stuff!

Well, keep in mind that this is me writing :P I ended my last love story with one main character calling the other a suicidal moron as a romantic declaration. But DR should be a mite fluffier...
melfinalupinmelfinalupin on April 2nd, 2006 05:39 pm (UTC)
So funny...must stop laughing....XD Too bad Temari wasn't there to witness the scene! But Kankuro was hilarious! I love him so. That and the holding hands bit. So Cute!!
green loony
I think that describes Gai perfectly.
'to have and to hold'
Was Gai-sensi performing a marriage ceremony?! *__*
Maldorormaldoror_gw on April 14th, 2006 12:01 am (UTC)
Was Gai-sensi performing a marriage ceremony?! *__*

Well, not an official one, but I'm pretty sure he was giving them the 'forever' speech, with sparkles on. Take your most extravagant marriage vows you can imagine, add a ton of glitter and a Good Guy Pose, and you have The Speech (I didn't have the heart to actually write the thing down)
Alisonsonnie_skies on April 2nd, 2006 06:07 pm (UTC)
the presence of several full-length mirrors (good god, why?!)

Holy crap, I cackled like a madwoman. Very, very funny piece; Kankurou is amazing.
Maldorormaldoror_gw on April 14th, 2006 12:01 am (UTC)
Glad you liked it ^_^ Yes, Kankuro is amazing. For not being stark raving mad after all he's been through the past few months.
Luel Exana: *heart*luel_exana on April 2nd, 2006 06:33 pm (UTC)
hahaha That was all kinds of awesome right there. I love how you write Kankuro's voice, it's hilarious. Much love for 4am Kankuro. <3

'A second glance informed him that this wasn't 'skipping along the road' hand-holding, it was an anchoring death grip, and it wasn't even clear who was anchoring whom because they both looked pretty ragged.'

That was strangely touching. There is that moment of hilarity at the thought of Gaara and Lee holding hands, but it's more serious than that. I like that you made them do something 'sappy' like that, because after such a scare, you WOULD be clinging onto the other person for dear life. It's touchingly human, something you don't usually associate with Gaara...

And your Kankuro vs. Kakashi slays me good. XD Kakashi is just so damn cool, and it's great that the reason he's at Gai's is for moral support. How humane of him. The implied friendship he has with Gai here reminds me a bit of 'Break in the Routine' too, which is great because I loved your characterizations of them in that fic too.

I think my love for your Kankuro vs. Kakashi can be summed up nicely in:

'Kakashi lifted his head from his book, looked at Gaara and then glanced over at Kankuro.
"I'm a bit surprised now," he offered helpfully.'


*pfft* Yeah, love your Kakashi. XD

Great job on this! Can't wait until the next installment. It's sad that it's over, but I'm looking forward to your next project. ;) *thumbs up and pea-green pyjamas for you*
Maldorormaldoror_gw on April 14th, 2006 12:05 am (UTC)
I think Gaara is slowly thawing at the edges. And the thing is, he has no particular shame or preconcepts of what 'cool' should be, so if he feels like holding Lee's hand, he damn well will and Coffin anybody who tries to stop him :P

The Kankuro-Kakashi back-and-forth snark was the first part of this chapter I wrote, as it came to me a couple of months ago (I write these far in advance, for the most part). It seemed like a nice way of having an outside - and amusingly dry - eye on the proceedings. Otherwise it would have drowned in the sparkles from Gai's teeth.
K. Takefutago_02 on April 2nd, 2006 06:56 pm (UTC)
well, i needed to catch up.... :) but this little chapter was so. funny. :) i started cracking up throughout the entire thing. :) and lee and gaara are just so amazingly cute! :)
Maldorormaldoror_gw on April 14th, 2006 12:50 am (UTC)
Lol, don't talk to me about catching up, I'm only finally seeing the top of my Review And REad pile ^^; Glad you liked the chapter!
mehla_seraphimmehla_seraphim on April 2nd, 2006 07:24 pm (UTC)
Lol!! Oh Man now all I have to really see is team 7 and Neji and Tenten's reactions and I'll be set for this story to end.

I loved this part. "and the presence of several full-length mirrors (good god, why?!) " Hehe. I liked that Gaara was actually paying attention to Gai. Great chapter. So sweet and silly. Best combo ever.
Maldorormaldoror_gw on April 14th, 2006 12:53 am (UTC)
I'm sorta thinking about Team 7, but if I do Team Gai, it will be as a quick paragraph in the Team 7 side story. I sort of liked the idea of Gaara listening solemnly to Gai; Gaara doesn't have any notion of what's cool or not, and he knows this is virtually Lee's father, so I think he'd be patient. The first few times :P
tokagemusume on April 2nd, 2006 07:40 pm (UTC)
Ya Know...
...I think we, meaning the whole LJ-writer-reader continuum, need to recognize there's a point past which we ought not to expect you gunWriters to respond specifically to comments. I mean, when someone is getting in the dozens of them on several fronts like you, Viridian5, Scribblemoose, Paxnirvana...et al it seems unrealistic to imagine that you even COULD keep up!
Maybe one big ol' shout back to all your fans now and then would be a better use of your valuable (and scarce, I'm sure!!) time... I know I'd personally find that completely understandable. There's only so many hours in the day and writing takes a lot of time.
You're a real sweetie to try to keep up but you get to sleep, too! LOL

Maldorormaldoror_gw on April 14th, 2006 12:56 am (UTC)
Re: Ya Know...
Lol, I hear you, and you're right (especially about sleep...) But I just can't help feeling bad if I don't answer ^^; On a forum like AFF.net, it's not so bad, but LJ feels more personal, and some of the reviews are really funny or raise good points. And of course, if I answer some, I have to answer all ^^; Meh, I'll manage, somehow ^_^ I might skip answering the shorter ones when I have a lot to do.
Qaddafi the Ripper: Naruto: Evil weaselqaddafi on April 2nd, 2006 08:10 pm (UTC)
I am dying of laughter with the mental picture of Gaara giving one of Gai's patented Springtime of Youth speeches. That might be one of the signs of the Apocalypse.

And I love Kankuro's thoughts, and Kakashi-the-peanut-gallery. Am looking forward to your new fic. (How the HELL do you write so fast?)
Maldorormaldoror_gw on April 14th, 2006 11:52 pm (UTC)
I am dying of laughter with the mental picture of Gaara giving one of Gai's patented Springtime of Youth speeches. That might be one of the signs of the Apocalypse.

I don't know if it'd be a sign of the apocalypse, or a sign to cut down on the liquor :P

How do I write so fast? Well, obession is the simple answer ^^; I don't have many hobbies apart from writing. ANd I still don't have enough time to write all I want *whimper* When the plot bunnies assault me, they come in squadrons...
raccoonofyouthraccoonofyouth on April 2nd, 2006 08:30 pm (UTC)
Sorry I didn't reiew sooner~!

*dies a million times over with laughter*

Well, all my created juices were spent on that little tid bit since I've been typing and drawing up a storm of original crap.

I can't wait until Kindred comes out, it's got me all flustered ^^
Maldorormaldoror_gw on April 14th, 2006 11:53 pm (UTC)
All my juices went to finishing DR, and I still ran out. The epilogue is giving me a hard time *pout* But Kindred is already written up till chapter 8 or something, and I should post the next installment tomorrow ^_^
aloebandaid on April 2nd, 2006 08:38 pm (UTC)
Hey! How do you do it? How do you write so fast, and so well? You're characterization is flawless. And this chapter had just the right kind of humor ^_^. Loved the little unspoken who-can-surprise-whom match between Kankouro and Kakashi. Just hilarious. The perfect touch-- when Gaara decides to stay with Lee and endure Gai's grand declarations. I could just imagine the scene vividly...Lee soaking in every word of Gai sensei's, and Gaara just standing there stoically.

I can't wait for the epilogue and Kindred. I am very happy it's going to be another chapter story, as opposed to a one-shot. Although I've read both drunken fist and chicken soup, and they were downright wicked; I loved them both too, every single word.
Maldorormaldoror_gw on April 14th, 2006 11:56 pm (UTC)
The secret of my writing...is obsession ^^; I spend waaaaay too much time on this hobby, and I just chew on a scene until I feel it's as IC and interesting and potent as I can make it.

Oh, Kindred is definitely a multi-parter (sigh). It won't be as long as DR, not by half, but it will still keep me very busy and obsessed and challenged and flustered and crazy for awhile to come ^_^
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Maldorormaldoror_gw on April 15th, 2006 04:58 am (UTC)
Yes, I would think Gaara spouting off about the Springtime of Love would make anyone want to leave, or at least plug their ears and close their eyes

Suicide might be another acceptable option. Lol, my apologies to your roomie ;)
(Anonymous) on April 2nd, 2006 08:56 pm (UTC)
Gai staggered back in a way that could only be described as 'theatrical'...

You in-character descriptiveness always floors me. Even the simplest sentence brims with this power. Beautiful chapter again <3
Maldorormaldoror_gw on April 15th, 2006 04:58 am (UTC)
Or, as Gai would say, Overflows with The Power of Youth!! Thanks ^_^
Asako Michiruasako_michiru on April 2nd, 2006 09:01 pm (UTC)
You.. made me hyperventilate. omfg. XDD
Lord of Eyebrow... KILLED me.
Kankurou... KILLED me.
Kakashi... made me choke and THEN killed me.

I loved this one! and and...

I can't wait to read the new fic *-*
Maldorormaldoror_gw on April 15th, 2006 04:59 am (UTC)
Yeah, triple homicide! I rule! ;) Glad you liked it! The next fic won't be quite so amusing, but it should still have its morbidly humorous moments.
(Anonymous) on April 2nd, 2006 09:04 pm (UTC)
This gave me so many fangirl giggle-fits! Gai... Lee... Kakashi... Kankuro... and Gaara! Gaara listening to Gai-sensei talk about the Springtime of Love. "Something here he was trying to understand", indeed. Something he's been trying to understand for weeks :)
complexphoenixcomplexphoenix on April 2nd, 2006 09:04 pm (UTC)
That was me. Why does this thing keep logging me off?
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fallingscribble on April 2nd, 2006 09:32 pm (UTC)
...*heartheartheart*

Marry me.

Kankuro and Kakashi, awk, the poor guys. Love them to bits. And Lee and Gai and wide-eyed Gaara and...
Could not ask for better sidestory. *heart*
Maldorormaldoror_gw on April 15th, 2006 05:01 am (UTC)
Unfortunately, I'm already married to this guy I keep around the house and that I feed from time to time ^_~ Glad you liked the sidestory!
The Consulting Detectivebootoye on April 2nd, 2006 11:29 pm (UTC)
so funny...
My goodness I laughed so much reading this I had to hold my mouth.

Poor kankuro.

I am so glad that we got to see Lee and Gaara visit Gai-sensei, that was hilarious.

Kakashi was great as well. He really seems to be every where and know every thing.

I also couldn't help but notice that Gaara has come to understand his feelings for Lee or else he never would have answered as he did. That makes me feel so squishy *squish*

Once again I must say that I dislike the teasing thought of having to wait 3 weeks for another chapter, but I guess then it would mean a longer time with DR.



btw in the first line in this story I must point out that cut has no past tense form it should be bowl-cut, cutted is not a word. :)
Maldorormaldoror_gw on April 15th, 2006 05:03 am (UTC)
Re: so funny...
THough I didn't write it out, I think the fact that Gaara was willing to let Lee go if Lee wanted to, plus his feelings when Tsunade threatened to bust Lee back to civilian, must have informed our intelligent (if emotionally retarded) Kazekage that yes, he did share some strong affection with Lee. Maybe in another few years, he'll manage the L-O-V-E thing :P

(That first line being Kankuro's inner mutterings, it's deliberatly not gramatically correct)
The Master of Evil: Beautiful Smilelykomancer on April 2nd, 2006 11:31 pm (UTC)
I come into this rather late, having just discovered DR through random link-hopping around.

However late I may be, I must say that this arc is simply one of the. best. pieces of fanfic I have ever read, and I read a hell of a lot of fanfic. I am blow-away, amazed, awestruck, inspired. I read the entire thing in one night, and I had to take breaks because I found myself getting sucked too far into the story and into the emotions; I was laughing and crying and goddamn yelling at the computer... I was emotionally eviscerated, and then would read the next chapter and be revived.

There are no words for how wonderful this is and how deeply you managed to touch me. (I know, I know; it sounds silly-- touched by fanfiction-- but it's true. Like any writing, well-written fanfic appeals to the human condition and heart.)

I am reading some of your other fics now, and I continue to be impressed. You are a phenomenal writer with an excellent grasp of characterization and plotting.

__
...this might be jumping the gun a wee bit, buuuuuut...I am right now trying to gain responsibility for management and upkeep of the pretty-much abandoned Scimitar Smile Naruto archives, since I think it's a damned shame that the archive exists without being used. If I were to become the Naruto-portion SS webmistress-- and I don't see why I won't, at this point, really-- I would be very, very, very interested in archiving your writing, with your permission, of course.

In any case, though, thank you so much for writing. Thank you. Thank you.
Maldorormaldoror_gw on April 7th, 2006 04:48 am (UTC)
Lol, sure, if you want to archive this, go ahead ^_^ I have some GW stuff on Scimitar Smiles I believe, Sol put up one of my fics there (one of the crack ones, if I remember right...)

Glad you like the fic so much ^____^ Readers yelling at the computer is generally a good sign :P I'm particularly happy to hear people liking the plot and characterisation, since they're hard to keep balanced and realistic sometime. Meh, it's part of the challenge! I guess ^_^;
love and joy and hijinks: ::buttprint!:: [mine]permetaform on April 3rd, 2006 01:51 am (UTC)
EEEE ::glomps you::
tokagemusume on April 3rd, 2006 02:33 am (UTC)
*g*
I loved Kakashi and Kankuro in the background as Gai-sensei waxed euphoric. Very funny!
Maldorormaldoror_gw on April 15th, 2006 05:05 am (UTC)
Re: *g*
Yeah, that part of the scene came to me early on. And I realized that it allowed me to show the full glory that is Gai-sensei, without having to hit anybody over the head with the fully written-out speech :P Plus, Kankuro and Kakashi trying to out-cool each other tickled my sense of humour ^_^
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