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04 February 2006 @ 11:21 am
Naruto Fic: Diplomatic Relations, Part Eighteen  
Latest chapter. Please read warnings ^_^
Now I go back to bed *coughs, sniffles, hates winter with a passion*

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Doewiebele: Shakingdoewiebele on February 5th, 2006 06:05 pm (UTC)

I like your realistic sex scenes. Yes, it was hot. Yes, it was breathtakingly sweet. Yes, it was still romantic... the fumbling just added to that if you ask me. Yes, it was refreshingly different from other lemons. Yes, it was a believeble scene. Yes, it was REAL; the characters were REAL... the way you portrayed the doubts and feelings coming along 'firsttimebuttsmex' were REAL. And don't try to make your lemons 'normal' just make 'em Mal-style... for that is how I love 'em.

It was certainly worth the waiting!
Xellos_No_Himitsuyuki_no_kitsune on February 6th, 2006 01:18 am (UTC)
...Your icon...*dies*
the icon is... indescibeable! - thewarriorkai on February 9th, 2006 07:05 am (UTC) (Expand)
Re: the icon is... indescibeable! - doewiebele on February 9th, 2006 08:43 am (UTC) (Expand)
(no subject) - maldoror_gw on February 17th, 2006 03:59 am (UTC) (Expand)
(Anonymous) on February 5th, 2006 10:32 pm (UTC)
WAI!! This is the first time I've gotten to actually review your story, but I want to tell you I've been following this almost religiously. *blushes* Ano, you probably get annoyed with fangirlish things like that but it just makes me wanna dance and scream and throw a huge party with every chapter I read!

I can't wait for the next chapter, you really made my awesome weekend even MORE awesome.
Maldorormaldoror_gw on February 17th, 2006 04:00 am (UTC)
Lol, I don't mind fangirlish things ^__^ I'm a fangirl myself. *clutches Lee/Gaara banner and waves about* Glad I made your weekend!
Xellos_No_Himitsuyuki_no_kitsune on February 6th, 2006 01:17 am (UTC)
*giggle* this chapter rocked my socks. I love Lees hesitation and Gaaras blatent...Gaaraness! XD
Lees acceptance at the end rocked too.
Did I ever mention I love you? XD
Can't wait for more and I seriously can't wait till Gaaras sibs find out...
Maldorormaldoror_gw on February 17th, 2006 04:02 am (UTC)
*feels loved*

Ah, you already know by now that the 'sibs find out' chapter happened right after this one:P It was about time; there was just no way Temari would not put two and two together and get slash out of it if it went on any longer.
Lrayvah on February 6th, 2006 02:04 am (UTC)
Yatta! I adore these two.

("Make me believe that," he whispered.)

Maldorormaldoror_gw on February 17th, 2006 04:03 am (UTC)
^____^ I'm glad you picked out that line, it was one of my favorites in this chapter. It says a lot about Gaara's view of himself, but also his hope in Lee. I usually write way too many words, but I was glad how I managed to condense that into four words ^_^
neonlibrarianneonlibrarian on February 6th, 2006 03:17 am (UTC)
*pile of mush* Oh my. So much love for hot-awkward-first-time-sex. I think Lee should just be greatful Gaara kept himself from making any painfully blunt observations during the act...And is it just me, or could stupid-self imposed rules have fantastically kinky possibilites.

So much love.
Maldorormaldoror_gw on February 17th, 2006 04:05 am (UTC)
Re: Gyuh.
And is it just me, or could stupid-self imposed rules have fantastically kinky possibilites.

DOn't feed the lemon bunnies. They really don't need it ^__^;

Glad I mushed you! I also find the first time hesitation and 'which way should I put my legs' feeling to be more touching (and realistic of course) than Perfect Smex right off the bat. There's a feeling of discovering and growing together that wafts out of this chapter, quite embarrassing my callous inner self who strenuously denies that she's a romantic, thankyouverymuch.
naughtyginnaughtygin on February 8th, 2006 05:00 am (UTC)
<3 <3 <3 <3 I <3 you so much. This chapter was wonderful. Hot and funny at the same time. You manage the lovely smut mixed in with a great story and awesome text value. Once again, I bow down. *bows down* lol And here, just for the wonderful lemony goodness *gives cookie*

Maldorormaldoror_gw on February 17th, 2006 04:07 am (UTC)
*chomps cookie and stares entranced at icon*

Thanks! Hot and funny was what I was aiming for, since I love that kind of mix and it's way too rare in fanfiction. If I can pack all that up in a good chapter, I'm happy, the readers are happy, and Gaara and Lee are very happy ^_^ We all win!
obsessed_futagoobsessed_futago on February 9th, 2006 04:41 am (UTC)
New chappie! Hah, so funny how shocking it is to Lee at first...and they actually did it! ^^
Maldorormaldoror_gw on February 17th, 2006 04:08 am (UTC)
Thanks ^_^ Yes, Lee's up for a massive coronary soon if Gaara keeps springing this kind of shock on him. THat or loss of blood through the nose :P
K. Takefutago_02 on February 11th, 2006 07:17 am (UTC)
how... amazingly sweet... :) lee's concern is so frustrating sometimes, though... :) but gaara... now, he's one delectable dude....:)
Maldorormaldoror_gw on February 17th, 2006 04:10 am (UTC)
but gaara... now, he's one delectable dude....:)

Word! Yes, Gaara did sort of snap there with Lee being way-too-careful. Then again, Gaara's trust in Lee is pretty much absolute by now, whereas Lee's trust in Lee is pretty much not ^_^ Lee is also more aware than Gaara of the ways this can go wrong. Since he'd take a bullet rather than hurt Gaara...heh, he'll figure it out soon ^__^
complexphoenixcomplexphoenix on February 17th, 2006 01:39 am (UTC)
"Gaara, you've been mistreated since you were a baby and you've got a demon bound up inside you, but you're still human."

That is a beautiful, beautiful line. So sweet and touching :D

"When we first met, you kicked me through the Sand Barrier," his lover said in his unhurried, dangerous monotone. "You cracked the Armour, punched me repeatedly and hammered me into the floor hard enough to leave a crater. Even the Sand couldn't absorb all that impact; I was black and blue all over for days after that. That hurt. This does not hurt. Now, to use your phrase, get a grip."

There are no words. There is just <3 <3 <3

This whole chapter was lovely and sweet and sexy and good. Much love :D
Maldorormaldoror_gw on February 17th, 2006 04:12 am (UTC)
*loves you back*

I liked the image of Gaara being bruised all over after Lee kicked him like that. Which, really, should be the case even if Lee didn't make him bleed. Gaara may not have that much experience with physical pain, but he's not a wuss for all that, as Lee was forced to admit ^__^ Neither of them complained of the result. Glad you liked it!
sugalesshanghai on March 25th, 2006 05:20 pm (UTC)
...would gently take his hand and say something so sweet, so beautiful...

"Let's try anal sex,"

*falls sideways* Way to go, Ga-chan! XD

"Can you...tilt your..."

I wonder why does this line sound so familiar... XDDDD

That's one of my favourite chapters so far and not because I'm a pervert. ... not only because of that anyway. ^^; It was so real and sweet and... awww... *melts*

Mellblac_rainfall on January 27th, 2007 04:20 pm (UTC)
"let's have anal sex"
I almost died laughing! you are an amazing author and the awkward sex was really hot :D
Maldorormaldoror_gw on January 28th, 2007 03:27 pm (UTC)
Sex is inherently funny and awkward, don't believe anybody who says otherwise. It's also hot and full of emotions, which is why there's so much of it written down ^_^ Glad you liked it!
rhianon_lewelyn: Langerous...rhianon_lewelyn on March 1st, 2007 01:15 am (UTC)
*very, very dead*
(Incoherently babbling in sodden adoration...)

Ooooohhhhhhhhh, that was seeeeeeexyyyyyyyy. Very, very, very, very sexy...

Mmmmmmmmmmmhhhhhhhhh, I just wanna curl up and sleep now!!!

So intimate and natural and caring and even though it wasn't the "perfect" of Lee's fantasy, it sure as hell was to me!!!!!!!!

I can't point out favorites 'cause I'd just re-write the whole damn thing! GOD I can picture Lee's fantasy of Gaara getting himself off sensually against the cold tiles in his shower...

Oh my Gad!!!!!

(Dunks flaming face in bucket of glacial ice melt.)

Dear God you're good!!!! Sooooooooo good, soooo good.... sooo good...

*raunchy growl*

flyingplatipi on June 24th, 2007 12:16 am (UTC)
hahaha! i loved that part were Garra completely crashes lee's dreams of perfect sex...
and all thrugh it, i was wondering, i wonder wich guard is going to go to therapy for THIS round.
i can just see guard 3 going comatose and 1and 2 laughing at him...
and i'm so glad that i'm reading this when your finished with it so i dont have to wait for you to update.
Maldorormaldoror_gw on June 28th, 2007 08:39 pm (UTC)
Thanks ^_^ Actually, in this instance, Gaara had drawn the curtains, so no guard was harmed during the making of this chapter.
Solanum: PoT:  Eiji Hnnya~solanum_d on August 30th, 2007 03:58 pm (UTC)
You are now my personal god. Seriously. I was recced this fic by several people, and though I don't make a huge habit of reading Naruto fiction, I love Gaara and Lee so, I decided to come check it out. I'm so glad that I have. I just needed to stop at this point and say that nothing is better than awkward first-time sex. To me, it's way way way better than artifictial fanfic sex, where you expect them to be on a pink cloud with fuzzy woodland creatures standing nearby. I mean, really. It was just brilliant. So in character. So typical of young males. So hot for the realism. I find realism much sexier than fantastical sex. Just, I don't know how to express how much I enjoyed this chapter, as well as the rest of the fic so far. It's been riotously fun. Now, I must stop fawning over you because I want to read more of this fic. ^_^
Maldorormaldoror_gw on September 19th, 2007 07:26 pm (UTC)
Thanks ^__^ Yeah, I'm a great fan of awkward-realistic smex. Besides the fact that most of us can relate to that ^^; it also allows more room for love and friendship than perfect-mind-blowing-sex IMO.
(no subject) - solanum_d on September 19th, 2007 07:58 pm (UTC) (Expand)
saint2sinnerssaint2sinners on March 26th, 2008 05:04 am (UTC)
Some where there is number too storming up to number one, slamming his mask on the table and ..."demand an immediate vacation with daily counseling!!!...sir!"
Jack's Raging Geekeryna_no_nai on July 25th, 2008 04:06 am (UTC)
Wow. This chapter kept me laughing. Lee's recount of The Perfect Time interrupted by Gaara's request from left field. XD

And I didn't think the sex was weird at all. It was realistic and all the fun awkwardness that goes along with that. Great job.
Maldorormaldoror_gw on July 26th, 2008 05:35 am (UTC)
Glad you liked it ^__^ I think it probably was pretty realistic (once the Shinobi thing is factored in) for a first time, which tend to be particularly short and full of elbows....
S.M.saaski_moql on June 21st, 2010 02:31 am (UTC)
So many perfect things. Awkward but in that splendidly right way that proves how a good author can't write on autopilot.
zilentdreamer: Jack and Willzilentdreamer on July 1st, 2010 10:30 am (UTC)
The awkwardness made it perfect!!!

I've read fics where people we know who haven't had sex before go through it like its nothing, which is total bullshit since sex is definitely nerve-racking.

Awesome chapter! The awkwardness made it delightful, gave it a hint of reality that made everything so much more poignant.
razorwind124: Gaararazorwind124 on July 3rd, 2012 04:38 pm (UTC)
Sure, I'm 6 years too late with my review, but surely it counts for something.
I absolutely love this story. It's just freaking fantastic. Evidence of this is that I don't care that details don't match up with the manga/anime, and I am such a stickler for details.
You write so wonderfully... The ability to seamlessly flow through several emotions is something rare.
And reading this has allowed me to see how much influence this story has had over newer ones in the pairing. It's amazing.
Onto 19!