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19 November 2005 @ 04:32 pm
Naruto Fic: Diplomatic Relations, Part Eleven  
The next DR. Enjoy ^_^

Oooh, and before I forget, Archeeka did some fanart for this fic ^____^ I't s NC17 rated, please note. Also, (as you can guess from the rating), it's jumping ahead in the story a bit, though you don't need to be psychic to know that this is where they'll end up sooner or later. I did go and put it in the summary, after all. Go and drool over it here - but only if you're old enough please!

And just to make me bounce up and down a bit more, pyronekogoth drew me a scene from DR part 10!! That would be here, and this one is quite worksafe (except if your boss is some unreasonable SOB who minds you staring at pretty pictures and going Awww on the clock).

Disclaimer: Naruto is the brainchild of Kishimoto-sama, and I am not worthy. I merely borrow the manga's characters and situations, and make no money off of them.


Part Eleven: Breaking Seals

Lee sat up suddenly, as if someone had flipped a switch in his back.

He ached all over, but he was getting used to that. If he woke up without massive pain anytime soon, he'd probably just go right back to sleep. It wasn't even that much worse than Sunagakure coffee as a means of staying alert.

Of more concern was the way his muscles clenched and trembled from the effort of merely sitting up. That wasn't good. He had to be able to walk. He had to make sure Gaara was okay.

Lee didn't know why, but that was what had dragged him out of deep exhausted sleep. An intuition that there was something happening and that it concerned Gaara. If Lee couldn't walk, he'd crawl, but he was going to find out what the hell was going on.

He staggered out of bed and leaned against an IV stand until the room stopped pitching and yawing around him. He had a band-aid over the crook of his elbow, so it might have been his IV stand at one point, but he wasn’t connected to anything now. How many hours had he been unconscious?

A quick check showed that the cuts and minor stab wounds he’d picked up in his last fight were well on the way to healing over. That meant that the correct question was, ‘how many days had he been unconscious’. His need to check on Gaara increased.

It turned out that he could walk, albeit slowly. In fact, he felt remarkably recovered, considering how much he'd used the Renge over the course of two intense days. He should have more deep muscle damage, but apart from the exhaustion and the overall ache, he didn't feel that bad.

He was in the Sunagakure clinic; he recognized the drab tan hospital clothes he was wearing, the spotless white of the walls, the smell of antiseptic and desert dust that permeated the air. He couldn’t see any of the medi-nin around, or anybody who could direct him to where Gaara might be. He hesitated at the door out of his room, leaning heavily against the wall. There was a distant thrumming in the air, almost below the auditory range. Lee headed towards it instinctively.

He limped his way slowly down a long corridor to a pair of double doors with OR1 emblazoned upon them. They led out to an observation deck above a large, circular room. Lee thought he saw people moving down below, but he could barely make them out; they were cast into violent shadows by the ball of bright blue light that dominated the chamber. It leapt up in a stable pillar towards the ceiling like leashed lightning, humming and buzzing faintly. The air smelled of chakra and ozone.

Lee leaned heavily against the glass of the observation window and squinted into the painfully bright glow. There was something floating there...

His heart jolted in his chest.

Gaara was lying in mid-air, crucified by the light; he was stripped to the waist, arms hanging at his side, head tilted back exposing his throat.

Lee staggered towards the stairs. He gripped the railing and somehow got himself down the few steps without breaking his neck, his eyes always riveted on the form of his friend. His first flare of alarm subsided as he took a wobbling step towards the light. Gaara didn't look distressed. In fact he appeared to be unconscious - not very reassuring in itself, but as the room remained empty of thirty-foot-tall raging sand demons, it had to be assumed that this was under control. Gaara looked...not peaceful, but oblivious. The complex seal on his chest, however, was writhing like an animal agonizing in a trap.

Black shapes moved into Lee's line of vision, framed by the violent light. Lee blinked the bright spots from his eyes and focused.


It was alright. Everything was going to be alright. Gaara was definitely going to be alright now.

Lee tottered, and his teacher caught him by the elbow and turned him back towards the observation deck, helping him up the stairs.

"This way, Lee. We mustn't disturb them."

Lee glanced back, his eyes adapting to the harsh blend of blue light and shadows. He could make out the other people down there now. A few medi-nin, checking instruments; a selection of Sand's best Shinobi, fully armed and looking on grimly at the proceedings; and some troops from Konoha as well. They all stood well back from the centre of the room.

There was a jumble of symbols drawn on the floor of the chamber, with Gaara at its centre. Four people were gathered around him. Tsunade-sama and Jiraiya-sama were standing on either side of the Kazekage, their fingers held in a seal, their eyes closed; Ebizou-jiisama and the head of Suna's medical facility had taken up position on the other nodes of the pattern of symbols, their hands in the same position as the two Sannin.

"They're trying to unlock the seal?" Lee mumbled. His tongue felt thick and awkward.

"Yeah," said someone off to Lee's left. "We’ve been at it for three hours already, and it’ll take the rest of the day at this rate."

Lee looked around. Two other people had followed him and Gai-sensei up the steps to the observation deck. Kakashi-sensei, hands in his pockets, and Morino Ibiki, who nodded at Lee when he noticed the young Jounin looking his way.

"Sit, Lee. You're shaking." Gai-sensei pushed him down on a bench opposite the observation window. Lee craned his neck, making sure he could still see Gaara from there. Then he relaxed a bit, and concentrated on not passing out. Yes, not passing out would be an astute move at this point...

"You should sit too, Kakashi," Gai said archly, as his rival leaned back against the wall near the stairs with a small, weary grunt. "You're pale."

"That'd be my natural colouring. I can’t sit down, I gotta go spell Jiraiya again in a few minutes. It takes a lot of energy and concentration to deconstruct that kind of seal, and he’s not a spring chicken anymore. It's like trying to unknot barbed wire in the dark. Good thing Tsunade came herself, or we wouldn’t stand a chance."

“The application of a complex and completely unknown seal on the leader of an allied village and the possessor of one of the Demon Tails justified the Hokage’s intervention,” Ibiki murmured, in a reasonable voice that somehow gave Lee the impression that he hadn’t really approved of Tsunade’s visit despite this. As the head of Konoha’s security, Tsunade's absence from her village and her three-day trip here would have given Ibiki a lot of extra work and worries.

"Is Gaara going to be alright?" Lee asked, staring helplessly at the searing blue light and the figure stranded at its heart.

"Huh?" Kakashi looked at him tiredly. "Sure. Should be. Actually, he was okay before we showed up, except he couldn't tap into his powers. I thought we'd be doing the kid a favour by leaving him like that; no more nightmares, no more insomnia- he'd be like Naruto, the One-Tail all but sealed off. But he demanded that we remove it. Demanded, mind you. Didn’t bother with a please, either. The Hokage looked like she'd swallowed her sake the wrong way."

"It's safer off anyway," Ibiki pointed out.

"Yeah, there'll be nasty little surprises locked into the seal. It’s not much of a choice, deciding if you’d rather have Shukaku or Orochimaru in your head-"

"Orochimaru?!" Lee yelped.

"Oh yeah. This thing's got his fingerprints all over it."

Lee tilted his head back as he realized the three men were now standing over him, looking down at him seriously.

"Lee, the Kazekage told us a bit about the fight," Ibiki said. "Apparently you were at the forefront when his powers were sealed. Do you know if Orochimaru was among the men who attacked you? You'd recognize him if you saw him; his face is in our Bingo Book, and his chakra pattern and attack modes are unmistakable."

Lee rubbed the back of his neck. Orochimaru. Oh bugger. Just when it looked like they'd beaten back Akatsuki, some other power-hungry maniac crawled out of the woodworks and made a move on Gaara.

"I'm sorry, sir, I'm afraid I don't remember anything that happened after I used the Renge," Lee admitted. "But if Orochimaru was among those who attacked Gaara, then I must have killed him with the others."

Silence greeted that statement.

Lee ducked his head and blushed. "I doubt he was there, of course. I couldn't take down a Sannin."

"He wouldn't be. He wouldn't take the risk himself, not unless it was a sure thing, and nobody but a fool would count on taking down Gaara of the Desert as a sure thing." Kakashi was looking at him intently. "Lee, just how many Gates did you open?"

"I'm not sure."

"Five? Six?" Gai prompted.



Lee mumbled something about not remembering.

Another silence.

"I saw some of the bodies the Sand brought in," Kakashi commented, scratching the back of his bushy grey hair. "High level veterans, all boosted by Orochimaru's special brand of tampering. We're not talking walkovers here. I couldn't believe anyone could take down all those guys single-handed in a short time, even though Gaara said you had. I believe him now. Paint me impressed."

"That was a huge risk, Lee," Gai-sensei said. "You're lucky to still be alive, let alone be able to walk." His tone was strangely neutral for Gai-sensei, who could normally approve or disapprove of something at the top of his lungs and never hesitated to do so.

"Was it worth it?" he added, looking at Lee searchingly.

“Yes,” Lee answered immediately. He knew what Gai-sensei was really asking. The Lotus was a forbidden technique, to be used only in extreme necessity and for the right reasons. Lee had always been ambitious and eager to prove himself in the past; he’d been tempted to use the Lotus for his own ends before. But he had not opened the seventh Gate as a challenge; he hadn’t done it to count coup on a rival or to show off. He’d done it to-

Lee looked for the word that would surely explain why he'd nearly killed himself - twice - to defend Gaara.

The answer was right there in his mind, staring back at him. He'd known it on some level from the moment that sealing jutsu had rushed over the sand towards Gaara; Lee had just never had the time to step back and think about it until now.

It was intense and complicated; not as beautiful, pure and simple as Lee had always thought it would be. It blended friendship, lust, fascination, admiration, some caution, sympathy, and so many different shades of knowledge, familiarity, closeness and trust. It had all combined and now it was in Lee's hands, he could close his fingers around it and it was his.

He would have defended Gaara to the death; Gaara was his most important person.

Lee looked at the conclusion with something like perplexed confusion. When had that happened exactly?

And what was he going to do with it now? Gaara only saw Lee as a friend…not that that mattered. Did it? Lee was pretty used to one-sided devotion by now.

But this was different, he suddenly knew. It was more complicated than what he'd felt towards Sakura-san, it went deeper, and the plain truth of the matter was, he wanted Gaara. He wasn't a goal for Lee to strive for and never obtain. Lee wanted all of him, so badly.

A sharp dry noise right in front of his face made Lee start back and blink.

The three men were looking at him with some concern. Gai-sensei had crouched down at his side, a hand hovering over Lee's shoulder, but it was Kakashi who'd reached down and snapped his fingers in front of Lee's nose.

"Hey, kid, you okay? You spaced out."

"Er- er- " Lee blinked and tried to come back from his mental trip. What had they been talking about? Oh yeah, defending Gaara! Lee was still mightily confused, but some things were downright obvious. "Gaara is my friend! And he’s also the Kazekage of our allies of Sand! If Orochimaru was there, he's dead. And if he ever tries that again, he will be!" Even if Lee had to die to do it.

Lee sat there, with his fist raised and shaking a bit, listening to a replay of that spontaneous and horrendously brash statement, and he blushed in sheer mortification. But nobody told him off, or laughed at him for thinking he could take down an enemy of that calibre. The three men were looking at him with the habit of a lifetime of fighting behind them. And they appeared to believe he had his chances.

"Well, he's lost a few good people, as well as a lot of riffraff he probably doesn't care about," Kakashi said, with a glance at Gai and Ibiki. "He'll not try again, unless Gaara is crucial for some aim of his, in which case, yeah, he'll be back. And in the next plan of attack he cooks up, he'll factor you in a whole lot more accurately, kid. He underestimated you this time. If he makes another attempt, he'll try to checkmate you along with Gaara. It won't be that easy to beat him off. But don't worry about that right now. Here, Gai, take your student back to the infirmary."

"He's not my student any more," Gai said softly, eyes shining with pride. "He's a ninja who has now matched my skills in Renge, for good and noble reasons. He is a Shinobi who has my utmost respect."

And for a brief moment, Lee forgot his aches and pains, the way he was shaking, his anxiety over Gaara's safety...everything really was All Right.

"Huh-huh, he's real tough,” Kakashi said, rolling his visible eye while Gai-sensei bravely tried to stem the tide of his joyful tears. “Now when you’re done with all the macho stuff, go tuck your student into bed and fuss over him and feed him chicken soup and all that; he's looking a little ragged."

"Lee, before you go get some rest, can you point me in the direction of someone with pull in this village?" Ibiki asked. His eyes on Lee were intent.

Lee, still floating on the high of Gai-sensei's words, glanced at him questioningly.

"Orochimaru is a danger to both our villages. We thought that recuperating Uchiha Sasuke and defeating Sound would quell him for awhile, but I guess he's back sooner than anticipated, and with another goal."

Lee's brain connected Sasuke, Orochimaru, Gaara and Orochimaru's special brand of immortality, and his rush of pride and accomplishment evaporated. He was instantly on his feet and waving his arms about in alarm.

"That's why he wanted Gaara?! To use his body for- for that Forbiden Jutsu?! We have to stop him! Urg."

Lee sat down heavily, with Gai-sensei's hand on his shoulder to stop him from falling over.

"We don't know what he wanted the Kazekage for,” Kakashi said. “We don’t even know if the primary goal was to capture him, and killing him was the fallback plan, or if they intended to kill him all along. If Orochimaru wanted Gaara as a host for his Body Transfer Jutsu, his ultimate goal would be to get his hands on the demon inside the kid. I don’t know if he could control Shukaku merely by taking over Gaara’s body. What I do know is that the thought of Orochimaru powered by a Tail is giving me a headache.”

“I don’t think the idea is leaving any of us very enthusiastic,” Ibiki murmured.

Kakashi turned back towards the stairs. "I better get down there. Shizune's waving at me, Jiraiya probably needs to go sit down. None of us can keep up with Tsunade-sama for more than an hour at a stretch; that woman is a machine. Gai, are you coming back when you get Lee to-"

"What did you mean when you said you needed someone with pull in this village? Sir?" Lee asked Ibiki. He had big black blotches in front of his eyes from his sudden movement earlier, but his brain was turning over double-time.

Ibiki looked at him gravely, then continued without commenting on the way Lee was swaying on his bench.

"Whatever he wanted the Kazekage for, we have just as much vested interest as Sand does in taking Orochimaru down. But the Shinobi here aren’t giving us much information. They barely let us examine the bodies, and they said they found no traces out in the desert that could help them track down Sound."

"That's impossible, I'm afraid," Lee said in a polite but firm tone. "They can read the desert like a map. If they told you they didn't find anything, then they were-…erm, embroidering a bit on the truth."

"Lying, huh? I figured. Why?" Ibiki was staring at him attentively. Behind Ibiki, Kakashi also examined him, the one eye weighing him astutely, and then he turned and left without asking Gai when he’d be back.

"Gaara was attacked. They want revenge,” Lee explained simply. “Also, they do not trust strangers much at the best of times, and now the village will close rank more than ever. When Gaara's back on his feet- but right now, Temari or Kankuro will make sure you get the information you need."

"They might if they were here. But Temari went to do damage control at the Daimyo's court and with Sand's political allies; she won’t be back for another two or three days. Kankuro's out there somewhere, I have no idea where. I was told he was on ‘extended desert patrol’."

"Probably on the traces of Sound, then. He'll be gone for weeks, unless he finds anything.” Lee bit his lip, his mind racing. “Did Captain Sanada make it back?"

"Sanada? Yes."

"How many others were with him? From our original escort?" Lee asked quietly, with a glance at Gaara beyond the observation deck glass.

"Five. All three Chuunin were killed, I was told. One of the Jounin was in critical condition, but I heard he stabilized since then and should make it. The others are more or less okay."

Lee rubbed his face savagely. Later. A Shinobi did his job first, and mourned the dead later. "But Sanada is up and about? He must be exhausted; he made it back to Suna almost as fast as I could."

"He was probably out of it at first,” Ibiki agreed. “But that was four days ago. You've been in a light coma since they brought you back to Suna, until Tsunade-sama arrived yesterday. You’ve been sleeping since. Which reminds me: Tsunade-sama wants a word with you when she’s done here. She was growling something about you giving her a lot of work on a regular basis, and how the next time this happens, you’ll get nothing more than a band-aid and an aspirin to recover with."

Ibiki’s scars warped around an amused - and slightly sadistic - smile. But that was nowhere near as frightening as the thought of Tsunade-sama on the warpath in her capacity of medi-nin. She’d have the same opinion as Gaara when it came to ‘overdoing it’.

“Oh dear. Well, she can chew me out later, I guess.” Lee winced at the thought, but then he focused back on the problem at hand. “If Sanada made it back, then we need to talk to him. He'll be a focal point for the Shinobi forces without Gaara or his siblings to direct them. He'll have all the information."

"Okay, I'll go talk to him." Ibiki scratched his scarred chin and glanced at the door.

"I'll go with you," Lee said, standing up slowly.

"Lee!" Gai-sensei caught his shoulder, his impressive brow folded into a worried frown. "You have done amazingly well, balancing the forces of the Renge in your body and curbing its destructive powers, but you need rest, or you could undo Tsunade-sama's healing of-"

"Please, Gai-sensei, I have to do this," Lee interrupted gently but firmly. "Our villages have to work together if we want to protect Gaara, and I'm the military liaison to Suna. Sanada trusts me; he’ll cooperate with me. Besides, I know the abilities of the Sand Shinobi; if I’m asking the questions, he won’t be able to-…erm…”

“Embroider?” Ibiki provided with a smirk.

“At the very least, they should have gotten something out of the three men they captured," Lee concluded weakly.

Ibiki and Gai glanced at each other.

"They captured some? Great, they forgot to mention that titbit of information. Okay, Lee, if you think you can walk without falling over- oh, I guess that works too," Ibiki added, a trace of amusement in his voice as Gai-sensei slipped Lee's arm over his shoulder and started walking him to the door.

Lee smiled in gratitude at his sensei, but as Gai stopped to let Ibiki open the door for them, Lee glanced back over his shoulder and looked at Gaara through the observation deck window.

He stared at the pale form hanging in the blue light. He realized he was practicing saying it in his head: 'Gaara. The man I love. The man I love.'

The words sounded strange; wonderful; a bit frightening as well. They made his heart trip at every repetition. They were as solemn and sacrosanct as a promise.

They meant that Lee was engaging in one of his self-imposed rules. If Gaara was his most important person, then Lee would defend him with all his might. If he failed, if Gaara died, then Lee would follow him. The strength of that promise was like a deal made with fate: it meant that nothing bad could happen to Gaara without Lee being there to protect him. Whether he would be able to defend Gaara, or only die trying, would depend on the abilities Lee had been honing most of his life; but the power of the Rule meant that he would at least be there to try, come what may. Surely Life could work no other way.

Lee’s more practical side knew that this was probably nonsense. But it gave him the strength and determination to walk away and do his job, leaving Gaara in capable hands behind him.

End part Eleven

*puts down clue-bat* Right, the next chapter is going to be interesting, as you can guess. See you all next weekend ^_^

(Oh, I made a count of the chapters I have written or sketched out so far. This monster looks like it's going to stretch to 22 parts at this point ^^; I distinctly recall saying this would be a 'short series of small drabbles' when I started this insanity...HELP!)

Nobody puts Qem in a corner.qem_chibati on November 20th, 2005 12:00 am (UTC)

Another awesome chapter. You can see how Lee being around the place for a long time has made him more comfortable around - I thinkyou had a good build up for that, playing it out well.

I can't wait till next chapter especially after that tantalising hint you gave in responce to my last review. ^_^;;

I think you've done an awesome job with this story~
Maldorormaldoror_gw on November 25th, 2005 01:20 pm (UTC)
*evil laughter* Ahhh, yes, next chapter. That one's the interesting one...^__^

Thanks! Glad you like the story! I think anyone who knows Lee for any length of time will come to admire him a bit, even if they wince each time they see spandex or a pose XD
Alison: aerithsonnie_skies on November 20th, 2005 12:08 am (UTC)
orochimaru. bah. i would accuse him of being a closet pedophile, but then i realized that in order to be one he'd have to at least make some half-hearted attempt to cover up the fact he's obsessed with boys under the age of 18 ...yeah, that he's obsessed with boys under the age of 18.

i'm glad lee's finally getting some more recognition (not "oh shit, it's the guy in the leg warmers again!" kind, either).

you wield a clue-bat like no other. and just to let you know, i'm fine with you making this twenty two chapters or longer...
Maldorormaldoror_gw on November 25th, 2005 01:18 pm (UTC)
Lee's about as hard to hate as a puppy, but I imagine that the people from Suna would also grow to admire him and trust him after a year; he is bloody strong after all, and he's the only person in the village who has the guts to tell Gaara when and where to get off when Gaara is cranky ^_^

I think the main thing Oro is obsessed with is power. If it comes in a pretty package...well, who is he to fight fate. Yeah. No wonder poor Lee is worried...
Dark: Fanfictio horrorsdarksideofstorm on November 20th, 2005 01:09 am (UTC)
*attempts to kick function into brain*

*fails utterly*

Wow, totally wow. First, how you have Lee finally realizing that Gaara is his important person was very well done, with his usual 'these are the facts, how do I deal with them' attitude and no real denial once he realises the extent of his feelings (I love how the life or death situations bring that out in your characters ^_^)

This sentence:

Gaara was lying in mid-air, crucified by the light; he was stripped to the waist, arms hanging at his side, head tilted back exposing his throat.

killed me. Just the sheer impact of that image, Gaara completely, totally vulnerable *wibbles*

Oh, and total yay for a Kakashi and Gai moment (whether intentional or not ^_^), I love how they interact with each other and the comparisons you can draw between them, Gaara and Lee *grins*

*sheepish grin* sorry for the fangirly rant, your story is wonderful and I'm so glad you're planning on extending it *loves on you*
Maldorormaldoror_gw on November 23rd, 2005 01:29 pm (UTC)
Thanks ^_^ I've worked with a lot of emotionally repressed characters in other fics - hell, I've worked almost exclusively with them - but Lee is different. He might not see the truth right away, but once he does, he'll accept it.

Glad you liked the Kakashi-Gai moment; I see them as friends in this fic, but only out of the technicality of them not having fallen into bed for whatever reason.

Gah, gotta go. Thanks for the review ^_^
jade_dragoness: Iruka_LaughingKonohaNinjajade_dragoness on November 20th, 2005 01:12 am (UTC)
Gai-Sensei! *squeals in fangirl glee*

*grins at you* Well, I guess that answers my question from my previous comment.

This: "He's not my student any more," Gai said softly, eyes shining with pride. "He's a ninja who has now matched my skills in Renge, for good and noble reasons. He is a Shinobi who has my utmost respect."
Melted me. Again. *happy sigh* Ooh, I have so much love for the way you word things. *beams*

*dies laughing* Having the Sand nins lying to the Leaf and the way Lee describes it 'embroidering' kills me with teh Funny. I gave me the extremely odd imagery of Captain Sanada leading a team of nins in stitching little Sand sigils all over their clothers. *covers her eyes* My brain scares me....a lot.

*bounces* And how much to I love how Lee is getting recognition for his mad skillz? *bounces higher* I want to point and laugh at Orochimaru and say 'Ha! That's the kind of beat down you get for messing with Lee's man!'

And this:He realized he was practicing saying it in his head: 'Gaara. The man I love. The man I love.'
....... I'm melted into mush.....again.....*sigh* Why do I even bother trying to regain solid form? *bemused at self* Wonderful, I'm so full of warm and gooey feelings right now. *hugs you*

*sobs into her hands* I have to wait until next Saturday?! *wails* NOOOO!!!! *cries harder* You truly are a cruel individual. *sniffs* Marry me?

Help? *smirks* Are you kidding? I think if any of us had any say we'd definetly make it longer than 22 chapters. *incredibly evil smile*
Maldorormaldoror_gw on November 23rd, 2005 01:25 pm (UTC)
imagery of Captain Sanada leading a team of nins in stitching little Sand sigils all over their clothers.

Strangely enough, I got the same image too on the 12th reread. My brain scares me all the time...

Yeah, I wanted Lee to get some recognition. The manga builds him up, but he's always second fiddle. You the man, Lee!! And besides, if Kakashi could respect Gai for his power and only tease him for his weirdness, I'm sure most Shinobi - including those in Suna - would do the same for Lee.

Marry you? Sure! We'll leave in this bigamous foursome with Asuka and this other guy I keep around ^_~
(Anonymous) on November 20th, 2005 02:18 am (UTC)
22 chapters?? You are a wonderful, wonderful person. ^_^ LOL, DR is what's going to keep me sane until the anime stops spouting crap!!

'Gaara. The man I love. The man I love.'

I'm sure glad my roommates are out, because I started hyperventilating as soon as I saw "love". Finally! Good boy, Lee. Now it's Gaara's turn! Ohhh, I can't wait to see this. Thanks for writing!

Dreamdreamwarrior7z on November 22nd, 2005 02:06 am (UTC)
**is Leviathan's roomie #1**


I have no coherent reply to this chapter, so I'm just hopping onto my roomie's reply. Please make this as long as possible, and bring on teh lovin'!

Lee + badass skillz = Melting of me. Holehcrap. **squee!!!**

God, I worship you! **bows to teh Mal**
Maldorormaldoror_gw on November 25th, 2005 01:25 pm (UTC)
Lol, thanks ^_^ Just yesterday, another chapter (a necessary one actually) insidiously snuck into the narrative I had scribbled down. So this may be 23 chapters, unless I miscounted (that might have happened). Either way, this puppy is here to stay for awhile *headdesk*

Let's hear it for Lee and his mad skillz! Too many fanfic authors treat him like a bumbling, clumsy idiot. Respect teh Lee!
Maldorormaldoror_gw on November 23rd, 2005 01:21 pm (UTC)
DR is what's going to keep me sane until the anime stops spouting crap!!

I hear you...Writing it keeps me going despite one laughable filler after another.

Lee's had his final appointment with the clue-bat. Fortunately, he's not as stubborn as some of my other characters *coughWufeicough*, so when he figures out he's in love, he'll actually, like, admit it. Now Gaara's turn...Thanks for reading ^_^
joisbishmyogajoisbishmyoga on November 20th, 2005 02:41 am (UTC)

erm. ahem. wow. ^^; Have I mentioned I love you recently? I've been unable to review due to fangirlish puddlification. (Aka, I went fangirl on the chapters, then proceeded straight to swooning and complete mental meltdown of the good type.)
Maldorormaldoror_gw on November 23rd, 2005 01:19 pm (UTC)
Puddlification? That's good! *Checks dictionary to make sure*

Gai-sensei HAD to make an appearance in this fic sooner or later. And Kakashi too, of course. Glad you fangirled the chapter ^_^
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Maldorormaldoror_gw on November 24th, 2005 04:21 am (UTC)
It would be rather unlikely to have them jump into bed right away, but that kind of action isn't all that far off now; patience, young Grasshoper. And then there should be pr0n aplenty (assuming my lemon bunnies are willing to do their job...they're a bit lazy these days).

I wrote a couple of GaiKaka fics to satisfy my inspiration that insists that their pairing is downright canon and one of the best there is. In this fic, I don't see them together, more like good friends/brothers/rivals. Not everybody around Lee can be gay.
Trivrurounitriv on November 20th, 2005 04:44 am (UTC)
Yowza! That's one hell of a chapter there - clue bat most definitely managed to get past the bowlcut. XD And Lee impressed the hell out of everybody, yay.

Good stuff.
Maldorormaldoror_gw on November 24th, 2005 04:18 am (UTC)
Thanks ^_^ Yeah, it took a few swings of the bat (there's a lot of gel in the bowlcut, it acts like an absorbant).
Alyssaalyssachan on November 20th, 2005 05:15 am (UTC)
*double glee*
I love this story. I really do. Knowing that it is updated every weekend, I checked at 12:01 on Sat.


^.^;; Thank you for writing this. It always leaves me with a smile, at least after wailing "You can't end it THERE!!!"

So thank you, for writing such a great story.

Maldorormaldoror_gw on November 24th, 2005 04:17 am (UTC)
Re: *double glee*
I like to make people smile. I'm sure it's good for my karma ^_^ And I like to make people wail, too, because it appeases my Evil!Author side :P

Don't bother checking before Sunday evening for the next part; I probably won't have time to post it before then!

Thanks for reading ^_^
Battle Angel Productionsalita_b_angel on November 20th, 2005 05:59 am (UTC)

"He's not my student any more," Gai said softly, eyes shining with pride. "He's a ninja who has now matched my skills in Renge, for good and noble reasons. He is a Shinobi who has my utmost respect."

*sheds manly manly tears*

I practically COOed at the screen for most of this chapter, I loved it entirely and Lee and Gai just own my heart. HEE for Kakshi and his natural complexion and Lee's inside knowledge of Sand that he obtained because he's so naturally bumbling and easily likeable.


And love for Ibiki whose minor characterness still sneaks up on me because he's just so darn cool.

I want to squeeze this chapter into tiny bits *hug*
Maldorormaldoror_gw on November 24th, 2005 04:15 am (UTC)
Not only does Gai own your heart, it sounds like you're channeling him too ^_~ I'm glad I have someone to share the love of spandex and eyebrows with; so few other people really understand the power of Gai!

Ibiki has succesfully infiltrated two of my fics now. I swear on Lee's adorable head that I had no intention of featuring him in either! He just barges in on the sole excuse that he's a great character and bloody cool. Tch.
love and joy and hijinks: ::keel.joo.ded:: [ryodark_icons]permetaform on November 20th, 2005 06:49 am (UTC)
oh god. With Lee struggling out of bed and Gai's manly tears and Lee being competent and all with the sudden struck-by-lightening realization of what Gaara is to him and just ::ADORES ALL OVER::
Maldorormaldoror_gw on November 24th, 2005 01:32 pm (UTC)
*feels adored* Thanks ^_^ As for the realization...whew, about time I was able to get that one out!
K. Take: ANBU Sasukefutago_02 on November 20th, 2005 07:14 am (UTC)
I heart you. that was a really great chapter, see how Lee's become so trusted in the village! ;)
Maldorormaldoror_gw on November 24th, 2005 01:31 pm (UTC)
I like to show evolution in characters and the way people perceive them. Lee's been in Suna for a year; he'll be seen as more than a green goofball by then. He'll be seen as a green goofball with a heart of gold and a lot of grit and strength ^_^ He doesn't even know it, but the whole village likes him like he's a puppy-dog mascot or something.
Ashimistressofrobin on November 20th, 2005 09:10 am (UTC)
(loves you still and forever)

It's good to see more characters making it into the story. Gai-sensei and Kakashi-sensei were a pleasant surprise. I also love how well you convey Rock-kun's affections for Gaara. It's realistic, makes sense, natural, befitting of his character...you write in a way that whatever the characters are feeling you feel, too. Kudos and infinite NGPs for you!

Lol, I'm such a naughty fangirl. I misread the part about the NC17 pic and thought you were talking about this chapter and went, "Zomg squee love, LeeGaa smex!" XD But don't worry. Your latest chapter didn't disappoint at all.

And thus concludes my DR reading spree. I don't regret it a bit, despite it being past 4 am right now. Because you're just that cool. ^.^;;
Maldorormaldoror_gw on November 24th, 2005 01:24 pm (UTC)
Lol, not yet for the smex. It's coming, though! And hopefully I'll keep the ability to make the readers feel what the mains are feeling *naughty grin* That'll be interesting...

Glad you liked it ^_^ I'm also happy Lee's feelings for Gaara came across as realistic; I've never been one for the Eternal n' Perfect Lurve.
Forstoakdoitter on November 20th, 2005 01:12 pm (UTC)
*whibbles* I love you and your clue bat.And the charaterizations. Spot on. The build up! Amazing like woah.

*inchoherent fangirl gibbering*
Maldorormaldoror_gw on November 25th, 2005 01:27 pm (UTC)
I'm starting to become fluent in gibbering ^_~ Thanks! I'm glad the build up works, because stories where it's 'I don't like you I don't like you I don't- oh, I love you, let's have wild smex!' make me twitch. A lot.

Now for Gaara...I think I better put steel reinforcements on this clue-bat.
Forstoakdoitter on November 25th, 2005 01:30 pm (UTC)
*laughs* Definitly the steel reinforcements. Can't see much else getting through to him. However, he does seem to have an idea of *something* already...
Maldorormaldoror_gw on November 25th, 2005 01:35 pm (UTC)
Oh, he's picked up on something (having Lee shove him in a room and lock him in did clue him in a bit). The problem is, Gaara's got a lot of issues, so you just know he's bound to get the wrong end of the stick. Fortunately, this time it's Lee yielding the clue-bat, not me, and Lee's hella stronger than I am :P
Forstoakdoitter on November 25th, 2005 01:37 pm (UTC)
Heh. *grins madly* At risk of sounding like an airhead- I am, like, SO looking forward to this. I bet Lee wields a mean cluebat, and Kakashi and Gai might help..?
Doewiebeledoewiebele on November 21st, 2005 03:07 pm (UTC)
Just... brilliant....
Maldorormaldoror_gw on November 25th, 2005 01:12 pm (UTC)
Thanks ^_^
Proud_Snapistproud_snapist on November 21st, 2005 07:03 pm (UTC)
That was great. I'm glad you brought in our Leaf fellows for this chapter. And the glances and the subtle questions from Gai and the looks from Kakashi...priceless. And I like how you showed how Lee understand's the Sand-nins so well. Great chapter.
Maldorormaldoror_gw on November 25th, 2005 01:12 pm (UTC)
Thanks ^_^ I was happy to be able to show Gai and Kakashi in the flesh in this story; it's been extremely centered around Gaara and Lee until now. We should see those two senseis again before the end!
Illucienillucien on November 22nd, 2005 12:05 am (UTC)
^^ And Lee realizes he loves him, yay!!! Cute chapter, I think it was the shortest you've written, I can't wait for the next part, sorry I can't say much I gotta go but good job on the chapter!!!!
Maldorormaldoror_gw on November 25th, 2005 01:32 pm (UTC)
This IS the shortest I've written (except maybe for the very first one). I was actually going to mention that in the comments, but then I forgot :P I make it up in later chapters; they're starting to grow longer as I write them. But I still managed to keep the word count down, compared to some monster chapters in other fics, so I'm proud of myself *gives self a cookie*
Crystalline Starslikeredgold on November 22nd, 2005 06:05 am (UTC)
awwwww *claps and gives Lee a cookie* Good boy Lee the bat finally made it through.

As for Mal-san....God damn you have my love *hearts*
Maldorormaldoror_gw on November 25th, 2005 01:29 pm (UTC)
Thanks! Yes, it took several tries, but the clue-bat made it past the bowl-cut. Now it's Gaara's turn. He's not quite as hard to reach as Lee, but then again, he's a lot further away, emotionally speaking >_< Ooh, fun ahead!
Lrayvah on November 23rd, 2005 04:01 am (UTC)
These last three chapters were amazing! I couldn't get around to reading them for awhile but am sooo happy to finally catch up. Keep it up! ^_^
Maldorormaldoror_gw on November 25th, 2005 01:30 pm (UTC)
Thanks! Glad you liked them. The next chapter should be out on Sunday, as I have some last minute rewriting to do :P
blue_leafyblue_leafy on November 23rd, 2005 05:53 am (UTC)
Your journal has become my weekly stop point because of this wonderful story. The Lee's voice is really engaging and i just cannot stop reading and rereading it.
Maldorormaldoror_gw on November 25th, 2005 01:21 pm (UTC)
Thanks ^_^ I think Lee is a very interesting and enchanting character, and I'm glad it comes across in the fic's narrative!
Archeekaarcheeka on November 28th, 2005 04:58 am (UTC)
xD;; I wouldn't call it NC-17!! (Can't post stuff like that on DA, anyway xD) But thanks for making mention of it on here! *HUG*
key_revolution on July 31st, 2007 01:16 am (UTC)
I'll make a long, long sque-comment when I finish this fic, but I'm popping in here to say:

What I do know is that the thought of Orochimaru powered by a Tail is giving me a headache.

Gave me the most hilarious image of Orochimaru, with a shuukaku tail, flying through the sky using the tail as a propeller, like in a helicopter.

...Maybe it was more funny in my head

But yeah. Lot of love. The squee-post WILL come.
Maldorormaldoror_gw on August 5th, 2007 12:54 am (UTC)
Sooooooo....what are you smoking and where may I get some? ^__^
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